The Official Writing Challenge
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Oh, I love this. It's kind of like "Undercover Boss" but in a different form. Nice job with this one.
Wow this is a great story. I loved Shelley's heart. It reminded me a bit of the TV show, Undercover Boss.

I did figure out that John was likely the owner. There was a part in the middle where they were talking and one said "I should go greet my customers." I know this was Shelley talking but because you started it John stared into his soup, it was a tad confusing and made me think he was the boss.

I really think you covered the topic in a fun and fresh way. The story held my interest every bit of the way. The message is one we all need to be reminded of. Nicely done.
This held my attention from beginning to end. Loved the story, and it was well written too! God Bless~
This was such a wonderful and tender story. I couldn't stop reading once I started because I wanted to find out how Shelly handle the situation with some of the customers. Great story. Thaks for sharing and God bless.
Congratulations! God Bless~
Wonderful story. Congratulations on your well-deserved first place.