The Official Writing Challenge
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02/11/12
I love Biblical fiction, and this did not disappoint.

One very minor thing I might change... While exclamation points are fine to use in dialogue, they should be used very rarely in the rest of a story. They tend to lose their impact if you use too many. Try to stick to using exclamation points in dialogue, and even then try to limit their use so they have impact.

Very nice job with this entry.
I truly enjoyed this. I read several stories this week about Jesus and especially the crucifixion but this is the first one about this. You did a wonderful job.
02/12/12
You did a great job with narrating the scene and your dialogue was very good. The article held my interest throughout. Nice job...
I loved, loved this story. It pulled me in and I had to keep reading. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful story. God bless.
02/12/12
A wonderful job...I enjoyed the entire piece. God Bless
02/16/12
Congratulations! God Bless~