The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a fun story. The title drew me in and you didn't disappoint. It was a little hard to follow who was speaking though. Double spacing between paragraphs as well as having a new paragraph for every time someone different speaks (even if it is just one word) will help with that.

The ending was really good. In my opinion, the strongest part of your story. That's not always easy to do so good job.
02/11/12
I really liked this! This was an ingenious story...creative and fresh.
Nicely done. God Bless~
I loved the title and the story that followed was not a disappointment. It held my attention from beginning to end. Loved the ending. Thanks for sharing and God bless.
Enjoyable story and a good message.
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