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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Embarrassment (01/12/12)

TITLE: Slinky Silver
By Lois Farrow
01/18/12


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She was driving me mad, my flatmate.

“Where’s my new top?” she wailed over and over. “I know it was here this morning. I HAVE to wear it tonight.”

Oh, bother, I didn’t know that would happen.

“How would I know,” I countered, taking off to my own room. I didn’t want to hear her complaints.

“Katy,” Sheree stuck her head round my door. “Are you sure you haven’t seen it?”

“I thought you had your night-class,” I countered. “Why do you want it?”

“You know that new guy I met last week, Steve, he’s taking me to dinner. Then later he says we are going to a party but he won’t tell me where. Mystery destination he says. I do want to look nice, and it will be the perfect time to wear my new top.”

“Sorry, can’t help.” I steered her back to her own room. “Here, wear one of these.” Sheree had more tops in her room than I’d possessed all my life. “There, that looks nice, now go and enjoy your night out.”

She was only just ready when Steve arrived. Wow! He did look rather dishy, but as he looked at Sheree I could see it wouldn’t have mattered what she was wearing. She was going to have a great night.

At last she was out of the house and I could get ready for my own night out. Jake would be here at seven, and tonight I was going to knock him out. As I twirled in front of the mirror with Sheree’s slinky, silvery top on my slender body I could tell it was meant for me all along. It was perfect with my classy, black slacks. I allowed myself a small twinge of regret for my deceit, but I hadn’t meant any harm, and it was not as if she would ever know. It would be back in her closet tomorrow, and she would just think she had overlooked it in her haste.

Jake was impressed all right. I forgot all about Sheree as we danced at Eleanor’s place. She sure knew how to put on a great birthday party. The lights bounced off the silvery top making it twinkle and sparkle like the stars in the sky. Jake had his arm around me as we stepped outside to get some fresh air.

“Katy?” I whirled around as a familiar voice spoke sharply behind me.

“Sheree!” I screamed, overcome with embarrassment. “What……….?”

“Mystery party, I told you,” she said, not taking her eyes off my, I mean her, top. I couldn’t meet her eye, I couldn’t say a word.


I grabbed Jake’s hand and pulled him through the house. “We need to go home,” I cried, “I’ve made a big mistake, and we have to go.”

What was that saying I used to hear years ago, be sure your sin will find you out, or something?


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Verna Mull 01/19/12
What a neat story. I well imagine it has been repeated a few times with roommates! Well-written
Camille (C D) Swanson 01/19/12
I really enjoyed this. Well written entry, and good story. God Bless~
Cynthia Carter01/19/12
This was a good one.
Martha Black01/20/12
How true that last statement! Your sins do find you out! It is not stated in the story, but a trust level has been broken between these two young ladies that might never be mended. Good presentation of embarrassment.
Brenda Rice 01/22/12
I enjoyed reading this article. It reads like a real life situation. Nice job.
Linda Goergen01/23/12
Well written story showing the topic, with a great message too. Great job. Enjoyed.
Ruth Tredway01/23/12
Very realistic situation. Nice job.