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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Commitment (01/05/12)

TITLE: He is Faithful
By Cynthia Carter
01/08/12


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With tears streaming down my face, my shaky hand reached out and clicked the Cheek and Chong movie off. My feet left prints on the freshly vacuumed carpet. The year was 1983. I had been cleaning house all day, the fresh scent of Pine-Sol hung in the air, the night before I had been out dancing.

I knelt beside my Electrolux vacuum cleaner. I silently screamed out to the Lord. I knew he had been with me at the bar. He saved me when I was 12. He told me he would never leave me or forsake me. Tears rolled down my face as the shame of taking my precious Lord and Savior into the bar overwhelmed me. It only took one beer to make me drunk, but I thought of the lady in the restroom who was throwing up and couldn't stand. The place reeked of cheap perfume and vomit. Would I soon be like that, like my parents? I had taken my precious Savior into that mess. Jesus had drank that beer with me. I begged, ‘Lord please forgive me. Whatever you say, I'll do it. Wherever you tell me to go, I'll go. Whatever you tell me to give up, I will give up. Please, I just want you and your presence to go with me all the days of my life. I'm so sorry Jesus. I am so sorry that I treated you like that.’

‘God, I know you love me. You're the one that helped me put my little dress on, and walked with me to the little country church when I was six. People thought I was alone but you were there. When the church moved to the other side of town, you always provided a ride. Until then the only time I heard your name was when mama and daddy used it in vain during their drunken brawls. You were faithful. You never let go of my hand.’

I slumped across the vacuum cleaner; I could taste the gritty dust, smell the musty odor, just like my musty life. I poured out my heart to the one who died for me. The weight of my sin crushed me like a grape being squeezed for its juice. I sobbed out my confession, my moans gradually transformed into praise. My soul was lifted out of the pit and soared to the shadow of his wings. I stood up from the vacuum cleaner a new woman transformed by the power of the blood of the lamb. Is there anything that my Lord could ask me to do that He is not worthy of?

‘Jesus, I'm sorry for taking you into the places you didn't belong but I praise you that you went with me and brought me back to where I needed to be. Amen’





If we are faithless,
He remains faithful;
He cannot deny Himself.
2 Timothy 2:13


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Judy Sauer 01/12/12
Recovery begins only after hitting rock bottom. You did a nice job getting into the head of your character. Realistic wording, no matter the drug of choice.
Michele Fleming 01/13/12
We have all traveled down dark paths in our lives and yes we have taken the Lord right along with us. I love the way you played this out in your story. We tend to forget he is with us EVERY step of the way. I think we would probably make far fewer bad choices if we would remember this. Good job!
CD Swanson 01/13/12
Wow- this was a good story packed with powerful emotions, and a strong message.

Nicely done - great job with creating the MC's anguish and torment - Only one can take that "away from us" - and I was happy to see the character reach out and realize that.

I loved this...Great job.

God Bless~
Kristine Baker01/13/12
I love it that you had the MC near a vacuum. It compares the dirtiest place in your home to the dirty psrts of our lives.

Excellent play with the metaphor!!

Good writting!!!
wendell brown 01/16/12
Nice lesson shared in this story, in the flesh many times we will fail, But Christ who endured everything understands and will forgive us seven times seven! Very Nice Story!
CD Swanson 01/19/12
Congrats on your HR placement. God Bless~