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01/12/12
The tension was palatable. Well done.
01/12/12
I must have misread the beginning sentence. I thought this was going to be a list of dialog we all use to talk ourselves out of what we promise, then advice on how to get out of our ruts.

Then getting into the story I backtracked and it made more sense. Intense scene imagery.
01/12/12
I think this is a clever piece of writing. it's only at the end that we find out that Gert wasn't the wife. Reakky well done.
01/13/12
Very intense! Good job!
01/13/12
Beautiful job! Great suspense! Surprise ending!
01/13/12
Gripping story with a twist. Excellent!
01/13/12
Oh I really liked this one! Nice story telling. It held my attention throughout. I really enjoyed it- nice surprise at the end!

God Bless~
01/14/12
This was a great story! Nice job.
01/15/12
Loved the title! Excellent treatment of the topic.
Did it start well? Your opening sentence caught my attention. In my opinion, I prefer "Stan" rather than "the man". You did a great job of drawing me into the story. Great action and authentic dialogue.

Overall your story was well-crafted, and I loved the clever irony of the last sentence.
01/16/12
A very subtle message that sin is never hidden from the Lord's eyes! Sometimes people perish because of their sin, and others are given a second chance to turn away from sin...Oh how sweet is the never changing grace we receive from the Lord! Very Nice!
01/18/12
This man needs to concentrate on getting well, basking in the love of his wife. Then, as soon as he is able, he needs go to that meeting place with a metal detector and search until he finds the symbol of his commitment to his wife, praying all along that she won't discover it missing before then. Well done!
01/18/12
This is really good. You did an excellent job approaching the topic in a different way.

I thought Gert was his wife at first. I liked the twist. I wonder if you had put the possible answers he was mulling over in italics if it would have flowed better.

The ending was outstanding! I loved that twist and the open ending.
01/18/12
nit-picky red ink: okay should be written out or both letters capitalized :) Great story!
01/19/12
Congratulations on your ribbon. Nice job.
God bless~
01/19/12
Great story, Congratulations on your well deserved win!