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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Commitment (01/05/12)

TITLE: You Promised
By Wesley Hesketh
01/05/12


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How many times have we promised
To do things for our God?
Most of us canít carry through
And we donít think thatís odd.

We all pledge to be faithful
To do the things that we say.
But we canít give up our lives
No even for one day.

Yet we have lost our direction
Just wander Ďround and Ďround.
Stand in rain that is Godís tears
We know Heís wearing a frown.

But His blessed assurance.
Is to be faithful and just.
While we were still sinners
Jesus paid the price for us.

Jesus projects an example
Of how loyal we can be.
He stands before the Father
Pleading for you and me.

Do you know what Iíve decided
To be steadfast in my pledge?
To say the things that I mean.
Not giving Satan the edge.

I will be dedicated
To the one that created me.
He will fulfill his promise
That is to make me sin free.

Romans 5:8
Paraphrased


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Jeanette Oestermyer 01/12/12
Lovely poem you have here. It is so true and if everyone who needs to make some amends would repent, God would be much happier.

Great work.
Judy Sauer 01/12/12
I enjoyed reading your poem. Clever use of words.
Lawrence Hebb01/12/12
I liked the poem. It has good Rhyme and a clever use of words.

It also speaks to me of how faithful God is (compared to us)
Michele Fleming 01/13/12
Beautiful words! One little typo...In the second stanza, last line...Believe it should read "Not" instead of "No". Otherwise, very lovely.
Verna Mull01/13/12
Loved your poem. It had a cutting edge and good rhyme.
Kristine Baker01/13/12
Beautiful Christian commitment.
CD Swanson 01/13/12
This was a beautiful poem, it touched my heart. Nicely done, and just reall well written. Good job- thanks.
God Bless~
Nancy Bucca 01/13/12
I think this poem says it all. Great job!
Lillian Rhoades 01/15/12
Your poem reminds us of the need to be Christians not in word only. I like the metaphor of rain as God's tears.

Just one observation: In my opinion, The last line of the last stanza flows better if you left out "That is".

Loved the message!
wendell brown 01/16/12
Very nicely done in a vibrant way that will cause the reader to think about their own lives!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/18/12
I really liked this. It grabbed my heart and it speaks volumes.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 01/20/12
Congratulations for ranking 7th in level 2!