The Official Writing Challenge
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Honestly not sure about this one. Just not sure the beginning and ending worked for me. The subject (perhaps over simplified) could raise some interesting discussion too
You've tried something different and you are to be commended for that...
10/28/05
You use good dialogue and good descriptions of the actions. I too had trouble with the beginning and ending but otherwise your writing itself is great!:)