The Official Writing Challenge
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12/29/11
What a lovely poem - flowed beautifully and contained a powerful message.

My Fav Line:
"God saves our very lives
He gives to you and me
Jesus our redeemer.
Can make that program free"

I really enjoyed this. Thanks.
God Bless~
12/30/11
Oh, I like this.

A few of the lines didn't seem to fit rhythmically with the rest of the poem.

I love the rhyming paraphrase of John 3:16!
12/31/11
The enemy does attack on all sides. So thankful that God is ultimately in control of our hard drive. Good job!
I liked this light-hearted rhyme with a nice message. Some of the lines seemed a bit forced but you did a nice job of staying on topic and delivering a poignant message.
Great job meeting this topic! I enjoyed this poem.
Many of your rhymes sound forced. You may want to try to find more creative rhymes, or a less strict rhyming pattern.
I like the line of the virus "messing with your minds". Viruses certainly do that to us. Keep up the good work!