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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Download/Upload (11/17/11)

TITLE: CHOICES
By Hazel Robinson
11/25/11


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CHOICES

Judson Henry, age sixteen, attended a public school in one of the larger cities in the state of New York. He was, what one might call, an apt pupil, always maintaining an A or high B average in his schoolwork and always respectful to the teachers and administration at the school.
Judson’s parents were well-known in their community as loving, Christian people. They made sure Judson kept up with his schoolwork, monitored what he watched on television, what games he played on the computer; that is, as well as they could, and, most important, tried to teach him important values in life.
To them it was very important that Judson understand the truth in the statement, “We either live, or die, by the choices we make in life; and, “In life, there are consequences to every choice we make.” In the basement of their home, where Judson kept all of his toys, his parents had posted a sign that read, “CHOICE IS PERSONAL – IT’S ALL YOURS!” These words were downloaded into Judson’s mental computer; he was the only one who could, in computer language, “uninstall.”
The conference focused on today’s youth. Judson was one of the speakers. Now he would be given the opportunity to upload; thereby, sharing what had been downloaded into his own mental computer. Thus, allowing these very necessary components to be programmed into other receptive minds. As a subject, Judson used material from a story he had seen on a re-run of “Fresh Prince of Bel Air,” starring Will Smith.
Will was in high school and played on the school’s basketball team. At one of the games, the game was tied 90-90. Well, prior to the big game between the two schools, Will, by chance, saw the other team’s lead player in the local barber shop. The young man had a small boy with him, whom he introduced to Will as his son. Needless to say, Will was taken aback! The young man couldn’t have been any older than 18 years old!
The night of the game, the rivals were at it, playing their best! Last quarter, the teams were tied 90 – 90! The other team had the ball; the player was headed towards Will, who could have blocked, but instead, he allowed the player to pass him making the shot. The other team won the game.
At the point when Will would block the shot, he looked in the bleachers and saw the small child he’d seen in the barber shop; his face, lit up with smiles, as he watched his dad with the ball. Will moved and allowed the player to make the shot which won the game.
Later, Will, feeling desolate, went to the gym; He just wanted to be alone. The gym door opened and the player, who had made the shot, walked into the gym. He asked Will, “Why did you not block me? Your team could have won the game.” He said, “Oh, I get it; you wanted to help the young dad – give him an opportunity, so that he will be able to be a father to his son.” (There were several athletic scouts attending the game.) Will attempted to deny what he was saying, when the young man cut him off.
Judson, then, in a strong voice said, “This is the part that stuck with me. I haven’t been able to get it out of my mind. It’s something I wish I could put on bill-boards all over the country – no, not just all over the country – all over the world!” His mental computer had been downloaded again, and with it, came this strong desire to “upload;” that is, to share it with others.
The young man’s statement; the remark he made as the two of them walked out the door, “My situation doesn’t define who I am; I define who I am.” A very powerful statement! Judson realized that the young man had learned the meaning of “Choices.”


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CD Swanson 12/01/11
This was very moving and touched my heart. Nice job, and a beautiful message to boot. Nicely done. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/03/11
This is a touching story with a lovely message. Telling me about Judson's background really interested me and made me want to know more about the young man.

Though you mentioned the topic words, they weren't an integral part of the story.

I also thought the transition from Judson's story to Will's story was kind of abrupt. I remember that episode and I think it's wonderful that it made an impact on someone's life. Perhaps if you had Judson show how that episode impacted his life instead of just retelling the story, it would have been smoother. Perhaps just a line or two about the show then an example of how Judson defined himself instead of life defining him would have had a greater impact on the reader.

Your message was wonderfully shown. I think Judson's story will touch many people. You have a great deal of heart in your words. I can tell you have a passion for what you believe and you want to make the world a better place. Keep writing the stories that God puts on your heart for you have been given a truly talented gift.
Jennifer Suchey12/03/11
This is a nice story about the choices we make.

I agree with Shann's comments. I like the story from the TV show, but the way the piece was written didn't flow very well. We were thrown from Judson's world into the Fresh Prince world and back into Judson's. The idea is a nice one, but needs some revision to make it work.

Spaces between paragraphs would make the story easier to follow.

When "the conference" was first mention, I thought, "What conference? Did I miss something?" It was mentioned as though we were already told about it.

Overall, I liked the idea behind this story. I enjoyed reading it. Nice job.