The Official Writing Challenge
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09/22/11
Nicely done to trace their turnaround in attitude.
A beautiful retelling of a familiar Bible story. Well done.
09/25/11
I love the strong writing used here; the characters are developed so well in such a small amount of words, and the descriptions are full of real life - exactly how they would each be feeling is conveyed so clearly.

Isn't it interesting how, when we're cranky with another, or envious of their lot in life, just by talking with them we can see that, maybe we don't have it as bad as we thought, and maybe they are not as well off either.

I truly loved the tension and resolution in this entry. Well done.
09/25/11
Oh, this was so well written! It is so easy to be jealous, but how often it is different when we take the time to see things from the other’s perspective! You took the bible story and gave it a realistic perspective from both sides and was such a good reminder and message to us all! Just an excellent job on this! Blessings!
I enjoyed this modern take on the familiar parable. You did a nice job bringing it to life.
A beautiful retelling of the old Bible story. You truly brought the characters to life.
Sure a quick change of atitude and hearts also. I feel they may still be friends.

Jeanette