The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 873 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
10/25/05
Makes me think of all the opportunities God gives me to speak to the "Toms" in my life.
I was a little confused with the change from present to past tense in the beginning, but I enjoyed reading it. Very touching. :)
10/25/05
You are a wordsmith; phrases like "reckless and wrecked" are poetry in prose. And I liked the switch in tense when you switched POV. I'd clean up some of the redundancies in the first paragraph...and this piece will be excellent.
10/26/05
I enjoyed reading your story. It is very natural in its telling. Not stiff or contrived. God is faithful to meet people where they are. Good job!