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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Where Angels Fear to Tread (not about the book) (09/08/11)

TITLE: Fools Rush In
By Lois Farrow
09/13/11


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Hey, Jenny, whatís happened? I mean, we used to always say hello when we passed, but now it seems youíre avoiding me. I want to ask you so many things, but you donít come near, and I want to know why.

OK, we donít know each other well, you and Mike are just one of many young couples at church, and I come into, letís just say, an older age bracket. But Iíd like to get to know you more, and we just seemed to be getting on fine with our common interest in helping Mandy with her multiple needs in church. You also saw her through the week in your dance class. She loved it when you and the other girls did those dances in church. But now I hear youíve given up dance. Surely not! You were so good at it. I do hope it didnít have anything to do with what I said.

It goes back to that day I asked you to help, doesnít it. How I wish I could take my words back. I couldnít do the job on my own, and you were nearby, and I thought youíd be great, and you were. When you said you felt sick and needed to leave, I tried to hold you, because I couldnít manage alone. I should have let you go, as you really couldnít cope.

So there we were in a predicament and I wanted you to stay just long enough till we had Mandy dressed again and back into her chair. But it was too much for you. Ha, I said, thinking I was ever so bright, youíre pregnant! Mandy grinned; she thought that was a great joke and felt all excited for you. You took off with a stricken look on your face, and you havenít spoken to me since.

Iíve puzzled over this. Why was that such a bad remark? If you were pregnant but it wasnít public news yet, that would have been OK, surely. I could have kept your secret. Why did it hurt you so much?

Now Iím wondering if perhaps I have an answer. Could it be that you have been trying to get pregnant, and not succeeding? Could it be that your heart is breaking over this very subject, and my comment hurt you to the core? Perhaps this is your dearest wish and it is not happening. Is this why you have given up dance?

The Bible is full of women who couldnít conceive when they wanted. In many cases God had a wonderful plan for them, and when a child finally came, he would be a very special child with a special anointing of God. Will this be the case with you? Is God asking you to wait until the right moment and then He will give you a very special child with a future of promise and hope?

Iím just speculating, of course; I really know nothing of your situation. I feel I have been a fool to rush in with a thoughtless comment in a sensitive situation, where others who know you better would fear to tread.

If I am right, however, I pray that God will comfort you and give you the desires of your heart. You and Mike are one of our special young couples with enormous potential. Please forgive me if Iíve hurt you, and please, letís speak again.


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Belinda Borradaile09/15/11
This sounds so much like this is something that happened to you! I like how it is a letter but more a conversation- almost inner dialogue of what you are thinking to say to the lady concerned.
Oh and it seems we have all got gremlins in our formatting this week!:)
CD Swanson 09/16/11
Nice job...This was a different type of entry, interesting and I really enjoyed it. God bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/19/11
I can't help but wonder if this is true. I could feel the mC's pain jump off the page.
Helen Curtis09/20/11
This is such a clever entry, and full of emotion and love. Well done.
Linda Goergen09/20/11
Well written, unique handling of the challenge Ė great message too of how easily words spoken can cause unintended harm and we need to be careful what we speak. Great job.