The Official Writing Challenge
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09/08/11
Love it! Great version of Rebecca's story.
09/09/11
Great job based on the incredible love story these two shared. Nicely done. God Bless~
You did a great job retelling this familiar story. You helped bring it to life.

Try using less tags like said, asked, etc. Instead show us what the character might do. For example She hesitated; her brows furrowed, “Miss, may I ask you something?”

You are a good writer andhave a bet of talent. If you work more on showing what is happening, I believe you'll be a great writer. : )
09/14/11
Great dramatization – gave a modern feel to the old bible story. Great job!
09/15/11
Nice job. Congrats on your win. God Bless~