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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: rain (10/17/05)

TITLE: Be Still..
By Jesus Puppy


Be Still...

"The clouds are gathering, sir," the ship owner stated, scanning the darkening of the sky, "we could drop anchor, wait it out, or turn back.? "

"No," the man replied, sounding weary, " keep on, all will be well."

"Very well sir," the ship man said, keeping a firm hand to the tiller, though for his own safety, he has his crew set the sails to half. There was a good wind behind them yet, and they were making good enough time. Viewing the horizon, he thought they could yet make land before the storm hit.

He watched nervously as his passengers gathered around the main mast, huddling together for comfort as well as safety it seemed. The young leader of the group seemed to take no notice of the come storm, but laid himself to rest in the floor of the ship.

As the winds picked up, and the waves started to swell, almost over the sides of the ship, the captain began to be more fearful. When the rains started coming down in sheets, he had no choice but to cut sails completely, praying God would have mercy on his little ship. It was more than his lively hood, and his very life he feared for, but for his passengers as well.

The group was becoming more and more fearful as time went by, yet they seemed torn between fear of their lives in the storm, and fear of waking their leader, who seemed not to care of the ship’s struggles in the storm. Soon the fear of coming death from the growing waves, overcame them.

"Teach, teach," they called trying to waken the man from sleep, "the storm grows worse, we must turn back or we will perish."

Slowly the man rose up, looking first at his students around him, then up to the dark cloud filled sky. He got to his feet and walking to the foremost point of the ship, looking into the sky, he raised his hands, speaking in a calm voice, yet commanding even above the roar of the wind.

"Peace," He said, "be still." Straight away the rains stopped, the winds died down, and the waves became calm. Slowly the clouds began to break up, and once again the sun shown down on the little ship. The Teacher turned to His disciples, speaking softly He said, "Why are you so fearful? How is it that you have no faith?"

As the young teacher sat back down, unconcerned, and seeming not to notice what had just took place, the captain stared in wonder. "Who is this man," he thought to himself, "that even the wind and the sea obey Him!"

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terri tiffany10/24/05
Nice writing! Good flow.
Shelley Snyder10/24/05
Good story, noticed a couple of spelling mistakes, but nothing too major. Good job.
Rachel Burkum10/24/05
Good job. Could use some polish in some of the sentence structure, but a nice take on the fearful perspectives.
Jan Ackerson 10/25/05
You did a nice job re-telling this Bible story, with an emphasis on the captain of the boat. I'd change "lively hood" to "livelihood." Unique approach to the topic: thanks a lot!
Mary Frederick10/27/05
"Be still and know that I am God." One of my favorite Scriptures. Your interpretation is good however, a few minutes of smoothing out your sentences can improve this article. Good job, thanks for reminding me of this Scripture.
Julianne Jones10/28/05
As others have pointed out, needs a little bit of editing, but this didn't detract from the piece. I thought this was actually going to be about Jonah - you fooled me. LOL. Great to see that you're shining in this genre also. Well done.
Karen O'Leary10/28/05
Nice touch to a familiar story. Karen
Shari Armstrong 10/29/05
Nicely done
Linda Watson Owen10/29/05
I loved reading this take on the familiar story of Christ calming the sea! Very engaging story telling!
Debbie Roppolo11/02/05
Great story!