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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Great Expectations (not about the book) (08/25/11)

TITLE: Mr. Mc Dreamy
By Kathy Stevens
08/29/11


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“Mom! Guess who I saw today!” Shelly comes running into the house, breathless with excitement. Her hair is flying, and her cheeks are red with exhilaration. “You’ll never guess! Oh, Mom, he’s so good looking. He’s tall with dark hair and his eyes – oh, his eyes are be-u-ti-ful. He looked right at me! He smiled and said, ‘I’m happy to meet you, Shelly.’ Oh, Mom . . . . ”

“Now wait a minute, sit down and catch your breath. What in the world are you talking about? You’re all a tether. Here, calm down, have some tea, and tell me all about it.”

“Oh, Mom, I guess I’m being silly, but he’s Mr. Mc Dreamy.”

“He’s who? What’s his name, ah, Mc Who?”

“I’m sorry, I guess I should explain.”

“Yes, that would be helpful.”

Shelly runs her fingers through her long blond hair trying to direct it back to its predetermined place. Her cheeks and neck are not as red now as she lets the cool tea glide down her throat. Mom pats her hand.

“You look much better now, sweetie, start from the beginning and tell me every detail.”

“Okay, I’ll try. When I was at the ice cream shop today, I saw Pastor Matthews. He was sitting at a booth with this stunningly handsome man. I went over to say hello and he introduced me. Mom . . . he is the new choir director at church. He’s a Christian, and would probably be a wonderful husband. You know how I have been praying for a husband, and I have decided that I want that one. I’m going to my room and start praying for him right now.”

“Wait a minute, Shelly, I was talking to Emma Jones this morning and she told me about the new choir director and how good looking he is. She says that her daughter, Janice, and several other girls have their sights set on him too. Now tell me, with all these girls praying for him, which prayer do you think God will honor?”

“What? No, they can’t pray for him too! I want him! I . . . I guess God will give him to the girl who wants him the most.”

“No, it doesn’t work that way. I believe that Mr. Mc . . . oh, what is his real name?”

“It is Darin Mc Farlan. Isn’t that a beautiful name? I can see it now, ‘Shelly Mc Farlan.’ Doesn’t it sound wonderful? But I call him Mc Dreamy.”

“Wait a minute. Get your head out of the clouds, and bring your expectations back to earth. As I was saying . . . don’t you think Mr. Mc Farlan gets a choice too? Do you think that he has a list that he is praying for too? Why, for all we know, he may already have a girlfriend.”

“Oh, I didn’t think about that. That would be pretty devastating for all of us girls.”

“I think, right now, that several of you girls have your expectations set on him, and since he can only have one wife, that decision will be his. Right now, you and the other girls need to go back to your prayer closets, but to not pray for him as a husband. You need to be concentrating on being close to God, to grow in Him and to pray for the man whom He will choose for you. He will be every bit as dreamy as Mr. Mc Farlan to you. He also has a mate for each of the other girls.”

“Oh, Mom, my head knows you’re right, but my ‘dreamer’ is still going full steam.”

“Yes, I know, your expectations are great. It’s only your emotions talking, so put them back into a box and see what God has especially for you. Who knows, God’s choice may even be better looking than Mr. Mc Dreamy.”

“Oh, I never thought of that. God’s choices are always better than mine – I’ll place my faith in Him.

"Mom, where did you get all this wisdom?”


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V. Joy Ocasio09/01/11
Very good! I can relate to Shelly, so maybe I'm a little biased, but I liked this story very much!
Mildred Sheldon09/02/11
I thoroughly enjoyed this. That sounds like so many young girls that when they see a handsome young man to them he is Mr. McDreamy. Her mother gave her wise counsel.
CD Swanson 09/03/11
cute story with realistic comments throughout. God Bless~
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 09/03/11
This is a great story and has a nice little bit of humor sprinkled throughout. You did a great job of showing the reader a picture. Nice message too and a fresh take on the topic.
CD Swanson 09/08/11
Really nice job. Congratulations...God Bless~
marcella franseen 09/08/11
Congratulations on 1st!!! Good job!
Lois Farrow09/08/11
This is a fun story, I really like it.