The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story. It really made me think what I would do in that situation. I can't imagine working with kids and not teach them manners.

The story was a tad hard to follow. THE DIALOG WAS GOOD BUT PERHAPS IF YOU SHOWED ME WHAT THE CHARACTERS WERE DOING WHILE TALKING, IT WOULD BE EASIER TO FOLLOW PLUS (oops sorry about caps but it's late and I'm too lazy to fix it) you would help me get a picture in my mind. Little things like Samantha stretched her arms then turned on her side. Her eyelids fluttered.

You do have a nice sense of humor and this was an enjoyable read. Keep writing!
08/14/11
Interesting story with good points and messages. I enjoyed it, keep writing. God Bless you~