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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: The Importance of Being Earnest (not about the play) (08/04/11)

TITLE: Past Mistakes
By V. Joy Ocasio


Its so hot in here. It feels like a thousand tongues of fire are slowly eating my flesh. One inch at a time.

If only I hadnt been so stupid in my lifetime.

I would not have cheated that poor widow if I had known it would get me here.

At one point, I had it all. I was a ladies man. A respected man. A fun and carefree man. A rich man.

The son of a software genius, I had lived a very privileged life. Everything was handed to me on a silver platter with a silver spoon to boot.

I went to all the best schools and was handed the CEO position at my dads software company. My life was perfect. A beautiful woman was always on my arm and a wad of cash was always in my pocket. Then one day I was driving my sliver Mercedes home and this guy popped out of nowhere into the street.

Then it all went to Hell. Literally.

Ironically enough, I knew this man. His name was Larry. He was an underdog. He did paperwork. And brought us coffee. He handled all the clients and dealt with all the technical work. In truth, he would have made a better CEO than me.

He was a good man. A smart man. And a religious man. I know this because he never worked Sundays and because he had a whole bunch of God and Jesus stuff in his cubicle.

Oh, and I asked him about it. And then I called him an idiot for believing all that crap.

Wonder whos laughing now? Ill give you one hint. Its not me.

Oh, God, I moan. God, give me another chance. Ill do it right this time. I can almost see Larry now. Hes got it made. Hes in this wonderful, beautiful place. With light so bright its white. With golden sidewalks. With love and peace overflowing.

God, let me go back. Let me warn my family! Let me tell them we were wrong, so they wont end up here, in this detestable place. Im begging with all my heart. With all the earnestness I could have had in my life. I never understood the importance of being earnest before. Until now.

God, please. My voice breaks on the last word. I know that its useless. I know that God hears me. But I know Hes not going to do anything. Its like I can hear him in my soul saying, You had your shot. Your family and friends, I love them, but they must come to me on their own. You will never be able to convince them.

God, I scream, Save me! I scream it louder and louder. Over and over. But I know it wont do any good. Because in my heart I know.

It is too late for me.

What about you?

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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/13/11
I like this modern tale based on the rich man, LAZARUS. YOU DID A GOOD JOB Of getting in his head. adding the modern twist will help many understand the familiar tale.
C D Swanson 08/14/11
Good message and depicted so well it gave me chills. Nice job...God Bless you~
C D Swanson 08/18/11
congrats on your win. Good job, and highly deserved. God Bless~