The Official Writing Challenge
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In the areas of love, patience, and the Gospel, it is always a good idea to be earnest. Enjoyed your story.
This was a good story with a good message - to seek God in earnest. This had a good ending, most times it takes longer to reach "an angry" person bitter in their heart. But, with patience and fortitude, the Lord will guide us to reach those who long to be reached.

I enjoyed it. Nice Job! God Bless you~
This is a nice story. I enjoyed how the MC listened to Jesus speak to his heart.

Try writing without using the actual words of the topic, It'll challenge your writing to write on topic without using phrases from the topic. I also felt a bit distracted by the overuse of the word brother. But that's just me.

You developed agood story with a message many can relate to or learn from when witnessing to others. Good job.