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07/23/11
Thank you for the reminder to praise God in advance for His blessings that are still on the way - you're not alone in your struggles... there's many of us out there.. your psalm is beautiful and inspiring.
07/24/11
Here you have an exquisit Psalm sandwiched between two sections of narrative. Concerning the Psalm, I felt the phrase 'this side of paradise' is out of place and detracts from the Psalm. (I know you needed to stick to the topic, but I think the narrative section would be a better place to put it.) Also you write - The fire of my spirit has all but extinguished - I believe you should replace 'has' with 'is'. I truly enjoyed the Psalm but thought the narrative was a bit wordy and repetitious. Trust that the Psalm explains itself and avoid the common desire to explain what you wrote. Great job here.
07/25/11
I like the transparency of this piece, though it does not feed any desire for more detail.

The last four lines are a very positive confession that lift the whole tone. Well done.
07/26/11
You wrote this piece while going through a time of difficult trial and I can feel the emotion as you work through your fears and find hope again. I think the psalm is good enough to stand on its own, but appreciate the back story.
07/27/11
Story and Psalm both full of emotion and struggle, but also faith and praise!
I enjoyed both in their raw honesty and was uplifted by the read!