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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Fruit (10/10/05)

TITLE: A Little Girl's Fruit
By Daniel Owino Ogweno
10/16/05


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At first I thought it was my wife. But why was she persistently knocking at the door? She had just stepped out of the house for an appointment in town.

I ignored the knock, hoping that she would get tired and just open the door and come back in. “Did she forget something?” I wondered.

I had still wanted to lazy on bed that morning since I didn’t have any serious assignment. The week had been heavy but I was happy to finish an important assignment ahead of schedule. My boss rewarded my hard work by giving me a day off. Being Friday, I would have a long weekend.

Still wondering why my wife started knocking at the door immediately she stepped out of the house, I reluctantly stood up from the bed to check what it was all about. By the time I had my clothes on, the knocking had subsided. I went to the door but just for a formality—it had been about three minutes since the knocking subsided. I didn’t expect to find anybody there.

A young girl, about 11 years old stood there waiting nervously but determinedly. She looked clean but her clothes were telling another story—they were tattered and at some parts parched with different multi-coloured fabrics.

She spoke first. “Do you have a fruit in the house?”

I got her question but I felt I was the one who could have asked her some few questions and in the process find out why she was at my door that early.

I wasn’t sure if there was a fruit in the house. It was taking time to answer her. Meanwhile, I had built enough profile in my mind to figure out “who” she was and “what” she wanted. She is a beggar who wants some fruit to eat. But why should she start begging too early?

“I know what you are thinking”, she caught me off-guard. She continued, “I am not after your fruit, instead I have a fruit that I want to ‘sell’ to you”. Wondering what she was talking about, my eyes scanned the area and saw that she had a basket that she had placed on the ground near the flowerbed. I hadn’t noticed it.

All this time I hadn’t spoken a word. Again, before I could respond, my mind was busy profiling her.

“She is definitely from a poor family”, I established. They must have slept without food and that explains why she is out early in the morning “selling” fruits. I felt sorry for her.

As if the girl was reading my mind, she spoke again interrupting the trail of my thoughts and the preparation to answer her.

“I know what you are thinking, but I am not after your money and don’t feel sorry for me”.

She pulled an apple from the basket and placed it in my hand and said, “You can ‘buy’ it for free!”

I wasn’t going to accept the fruit without paying for it, especially from such a poor girl. I was not going to ask her how much she wanted for the fruit but I would give her some money that I was sure would be more than the price of the fruit.

Once again, she caught me unawares. “I know what you are thinking”, she said.

I was beginning to profile this girl as an arrogant little girl. She doesn’t see to wait for my answers for the questions she is asking. And, she doesn’t seem to have anything to be proud about. Why does she think I can get her fruit for free?

The phone rang and as I was excusing myself asking her to give me a minute, she hurriedly spoke the following words:

“That is the problem with you rich people, you think that you can only give and not receive, especially from poor people”.

When I came back after attending the phone, she was gone.

I sat down and wept. I had indeed refused spiritual fruit from the poor people, thinking that I can only “give” and not “receive” anything from them.


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D. Phenes10/17/05
Was this a true story? Seemed believable. Great job.
terri tiffany10/19/05
You need to watch your tense change and some words were left out of a few sentences. Otherwise, it was a very interesting story!:)thanks!
Garnet Miller 10/20/05
Interesting. Such a precocious little girl. Maybe she was an angel of the Lord in disguise, showing the man the error of his ways. Good job:)
Phyllis Inniss 10/21/05
A different slant on giving and receiving. The poor can teach the rich many lessons indeed.
B Brenton10/21/05
I loved the message. But there was something missing. Perhaps more of a jolt of this awakening. How did he finally "get it" - he came back from the phone and cried, but... there needs to be something inbetween this, a visual or strong emotional clue (how did he figure it was spiritual fruit instead of physical at the end?).
Anyway, great premise! A bit of fine tuning and this will be a great spiritual message for all. :)
Amy Michelle Wiley 10/22/05
Very interesting story. Makes me think. Good job! I enjoyed it.
Barbara Thompson-Young02/02/10
Daniel, a couple things stood out in your story, to me. One, the question, "Do you have any fruit in the house?" is such a profound question that we could ask ourselves in regards to possessing, "the fruit of the Spirit", and two, the comment the little girl made, "You can buy the fruit for free" stood out to me because while the fruit of the Spirit could never be purchased with earthly money, it will cost everything to obtain. I may sound like I am "rambling" but, really, there is much truth in this article, and I am glad I chose it to read today. (I had been checking your page to see if you had posted recently, then saw where you had commented on my most recent article. Thank you and God bless you. You are an encouragement to many, I am certain.


   
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