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A humourous take on a well-known story - but the barb is still there: they have to leave the 'Park'. An enjoyable read. Well done.
What neat storytelling abilities you have -- such a great take on a modern version of Adam & Eve! Good dialogue and flow...
Very smooth transition to the heart of the story, which of course helped the humor along! Nice work!
I like this take on the Adam and Eve story very much! It flowed very well, and held me from start to finish. Like the ending, left me smiling! God bless.
This is a very cute and humourous story, but I got stuck on a few details - like what other "males" is Eve comparing Adam to? And why is there poison ivy in the perfect Garden of Eden? Regardless, this is a great story!