The Official Writing Challenge
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05/27/11
powerful story, you have fitted alot in and at times it felt a bit rushed but you have told the whole tale from disaster to the circle of forgiveness and redemption. I can understand the dads reluctance for his daughter to be a police officer and i think it as more his concern with the risk of the job than the traditional male female roles.
i would love this to be an outline of a much longer story even a book......
A most exciting and powerful story. A lot of information without too many details. You get straight to the main idea of the story and I was glad it turned out as it did. Keep writing.
05/30/11
750 words come up fast in a story:) i'm sure you had a lot to tell and share, I often do. I might have left the gender bit out for this piece and traded it for sharing details about the rest. Like the drivers response. Or her father moving on or what he did. I enjoyed your story and it captured me quickly. Thank you for sharing.
05/31/11
Well told - tender story. Liked the way you wrapped up your ending. Keep writing!