The Official Writing Challenge
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Nicely written. I hope Jason decided to give himself to the one who continues with us when he decide to drop out. I liked your character Matthew, maybe an angel? I enjoyed this piece. God bless your writing.
05/21/11
You've woven quite a story. You had me completely absorbed and I liked your twist at the end!
I liked this story. There are so many runaways out there who need to know someone cares.

It's just my opinion but I don't think you needed that last line. I was thinking angel as soon as the character was introduced.

Your story is strong enough to stand on it's own without explanation. You did a stellar job on this one.
I truly enjoyed how the dropout became a drop in.Thank you.
Congratulations for ranking 7th in your level! (I did like that the twist was an angel, butI was trying to say you didn't need that last line to explain it) But all in all congratulations for writing a lovely story on a topic I had difficulty with.:)