The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a really good story. Taylor's pain felt real and many people can relate to that type of pain.
Something that would make your story even better would have been to show us instead of telling.For instance, instead of telling about her being a loner show it by describing girls picking on her.

You have a great idea and a good imagination, most writers struggle with the show vs. tell. Keep at it, with more practice and your natural talent you will have many great stories inside you.
03/14/11
I liked how you shared Taylor's struggle with forgiveness to another who had betrayed her. It was very creative to have God reveal himself to her in a dream.
03/14/11
Life is full of pain and disappointments. I'm glad Taylor made her way back to the Lord. God bless!
I enjoyed reading this. You did well by bringing God into her dream. Good write
I enjoyed this story. I especially appreciated the description of God's vision.
03/15/11
This is a lovely story, and (as with so many others' stories) I would love to know what happens the next day/week, etc. Well written with lovely descriptions.