The Official Writing Challenge
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02/24/11

It would be easier to read if you had separated the paragraphs. It kind of was hard to read.

A very enjoyable read, but I reread it to get the full impact of the story. Spacing between paragraphs would make this so much more enjoyable. Keep writing and God bless.
02/25/11
great story... i thought at first it was a " what happens in heaven" story but it was much more grounded than that... full of gold nuggets of truth... good one!