The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this very much. I love how God teaches us lessons in life. Thanks and God bless.
02/26/11
Ah...David! I love David in the bible...such a display of human greatness and failure. Loved your story! God bless!
02/28/11
I really liked your story, especially your wonderful description of the cave.
I liked how you retold David's story, interspersed with a little humor and drama.

Well done!
02/28/11
Your first paragraph really grabs the reader into the story! I almost thought you were describing the first David.

There was a lot of "telling" in the center of the tale, but I loved the background of the character and the comparisons he found between himself and the Psalmist. Great job!
03/02/11
Good title-it fits with the story and Dave's adventure. I kind of wished there was a bit more detail on his adventure and his accident, to show some of the bigger parallel's in his character vs. King David's, but it was still a good read. You had a nice point woven through it. Good job!
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