The Official Writing Challenge
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10/10/05
Excellent poem. I wish that descibed my garden! In one of two places I lost the rhythm, but it evoked a lovely scene.
10/11/05
You chose a wonderful passage of scripture to expound on, and used some beautiful imagery. Thanks! Consider working on more consistency of rhyme and meter.
This is a dear little poem; the phrasing needs to be tightened up in places to hold the flow. Otherwise very sweet. God bless.