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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: 24 Hours (01/27/11)

TITLE: THE DECISION
By Nanci Rubin
02/02/11


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“Don’t make a big deal out of this Sandy. You’ve got another day to make your decision. Heck, it isn’t like you didn’t know that this was coming.” Kevin tossed his sweater on the couch while walking toward the kitchen.

Sandy Souza felt like smacking her fourteen- year old brother and wiping the sneer off of his face. She followed him into the kitchen while he poured himself a glass of sweet iced tea spilling half of it on the counter. “Geez Kevin, do you have to make a mess with everything you touch” Sandy spoke in her eighteen-year-old big sister voice and added, “How did you find out who was chosen to mentor? Nobody was supposed to know until the principal notified those selected.”

“Let’s just say I have the inside track in some areas, and know those who are in the know.” He tossed his stringy bangs out of his eyes and sank his lanky five foot ten body into a kitchen chair, his long legs spread out in front of him like melted butter. “You’ll probably get the call this evening, but act surprised. You had to know, dude, that you’d be selected.”

Sandy wished that her parents would make him cut his shaggy hair but her mom had said if that was the only statement Kevin was making, she wasn’t going to nag him about it. She had to admit that his hair was not a big deal and for the most part he was a pretty good brother. Her thoughts went inward, geez, I never dreamed that I would be selected for this tutoring program and now I don’t know if I really want to commit to this. Her face flushed with shame, there were many applicants who had applied for these slots and it was quite a coup to be selected.

The phone call did come after dinner and she had to admit she was excited when Principal Sullins gave her the news that she and only four others had been selected to head up this mentorship-tutoring program. Remedial classes were so full that the school board had proposed this program for younger children who were behind in reading skills. He told her to come by his office after classes tomorrow and he would give her the study schedule and arrange a time for her to meet her student. Her student she thought and then she felt a twinge of butterflies in her stomach, what if I can’t help my student? What if he or she doesn’t like me? What have I gotten myself into? She had to make a decision before the end of school tomorrow. She decided that she would talk to her mom in the morning.

Sandy awoke to a serenade of songbirds perched in the sun shot trees outside her bedroom window. Saffron streams of light splashed across her bed and she felt exhilarated and eager to start this special day. The aroma of hickory-smoked bacon cooking was an added incentive to get her going as she hurriedly ran to shower.

She joined her mom in the kitchen and was relieved that Kevin was not up yet. “Mom do you remember when I first applied for this mentorship program? Well, I never actually thought about doing it, you know, the actual face to face encounter with a student. What if they don’t like me and I stink at doing this? I’m having second thoughts about this. Do you think I would be wrong in backing out? I don’t feel I can do this.”

“Sandy, you are a gifted young woman and this is an excellent opportunity for you to find out if teaching is something you really want to pursue and think of the young person you would be helping. You wouldn’t have been chosen if your teachers thought you couldn’t do this. Besides, you could minister to this child. I want you to read Matthew 25:40, I think it will help you make your decision.”

After breakfast she went up to her room and opened her familiar study Bible that resided on her bedside table. She found the scripture and was thrilled that it was the red letters of Jesus. “Inasmuch as ye have done it unto one of the least of these my brethren; ye have done it unto me.” Sandy closed the Bible, hugged it to her chest and whispered, “Yes Lord, yes.”


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Janice Fitzpatrick02/03/11
The thought and content is very good. I liked the message. Other than a few minor edits on punctuation, etc, ie:( Her thoughts went inward, geez, I never dreamed that I would be selected for this tutoring program...) your piece really shined. I was glad that she decided to go for it and accept the tutoring position. The scripture used for this speaks to the reader. I know it did me. Good job!!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/04/11
This is a great story. You grabbed my attention right. although the MC was 18, I think this is the perfect story for ages 11-14. Great job!
Mildred Sheldon02/05/11
I enjoyed this so very much. Once I started reading I had to continue. A very good story.
diana kay02/06/11
good story, good dialogue and great descriptions :-) legs like melted butter :-)
a am not completely sure you related it to the theme but i enjoyed it so much that i am not fussing about that.
Cherry Bieber02/06/11
This is a good story and well done. It makes me think of how often we feel the Lord leading us to do something and then when He actually opens up the doors for it we get cold feet!
Nancy Sullivan 02/09/11
Very good story. I agree that quotation marks around the inward thoughts would make them more prominent.
Enjoyed your message and your easy writing style.