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01/27/11
Such a close relationship between the sisters. Thanks for sharing.
01/30/11
I enjoyed hearing about these sisters and their relationship.

Your dialogue seemed a bit clunky--try to make it sound more natural. Try reading it out loud.

What a wonderful life, and closeness, sisters had. Thanks!
02/01/11
great sister chat good dialogue..... but there was a continuity error i think... they were chatting on the telephone and then they hugged.I know that one invited the other over for coffee but there did not seem to be any gap in the dialogue from phone call to coffee chat.just a little point