The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice description and detail ...I would only suggest to separate paragraphs.
10/11/05
Since most of your piece is written in 2nd person, giving advice to an unseen reader, you might want to eliminate the "I" and the "one" in your 6th paragraph. Good advice here; I especially liked your reference to the Far Side desk calendar! I miss Gary Larsen, don't you?
Sound advice. Good thoughts and well written.