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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Year(s) (01/20/11)

TITLE: The Years Go By
By Steven Kellen
01/21/11


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I started this poem in 1993 when I walked in the front door and found my 15 year old daughter sitting on the floor in the entry way. She was lost in a starry eyed gaze as she talked to a young man on the phone. She wasn’t one to engage in pleasantries with those “air-headed teenage guys,” so this was a totally event for her.

At the time I knew the poem was not finished, but I didn’t have anything else to say. Now, 20 years later, she accepted the proposal of a young man from Alaska and became engaged on New Year’s Eve. So now I have reason to add to the poem, though it still remains unfinished.


AS THE YEARS GO BY
IN MOMENTS OF TIME


I walked in the door 9-28-93
and caught her by surprise.
Clutching the phone;
wrapped in the cord
Clutching the words;
rapt in the moment.

“The Call Of The Wild,”
on a late September evening.
“The Young And The Restless,”
on the phone in the entry.
“The First Time Ever I saw Your Face.”
The first time ever he called her at home.

...and the mysteries of the future,
call to us out of the past...
first loves;
fast friends;
yearning hearts;
treasured memories;
stirred emotions;
“New Beginnings.”
So close,
yet so far.
Haunting visions,
of the past,
today.




Todays became tomorrows 1-20-2011
of days gone by.
The girl became a woman
wrapped up in life.
Teaching preschoolers
rapt in her words.

He stood under the stars
and caught her by surprise
With bombs busting in air
In the dawns early light
A Start Spangled Banner
On a New Years night.

...and the ring of the new year
became a ring on her finger
lasting loves;
fast friends;
yearning hearts;
treasured memories;
stirred emotions;
“New Beginnings.”
So close,
yet so far.
Haunting visions,
of the past,
today.


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Mildred Sheldon01/27/11
I enjoyed this unfinished poem and would love to know the ending to it. Good job and very well written.
Barbara Lynn Culler01/27/11
This brought tears to my eyes. I could feel the poignancy (sp?) in it. Thanks for sharing.
Brenda Rice 01/27/11
Thanks for sharing your unfinished poem. It touched a lot of places in my memory banks and in my heart.
Troy Manning01/30/11
I liked your use of parallelism w/ the 2 time-frames. Providing the backstory at the beginning was helpful. I think you missed a word ("new") in that part--unless "totally event" is another use of teenage lingo. :) Nice job.
diana kay02/01/11
i love the wrapped up interwined feeling in this poem. the young lady wrapped up in the conversation, you observing and yet also enfolding her with your care and i think the poem is complete in itself it does not feel unfinished. such a very clever and original idea.... maybe going to be a winner.
you wrapped me up in the poem too. I have a 16yr old daughter almost 17 who knows what will unfold in 20 years time.I think so many people will identify with this snapshot of a moment
diana kay02/03/11
good on you!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 02/12/11
This is so beautiful. I hope you read it at her wedding. Congratulants on your Highly Commended.