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This has a lot of potential... I enjoyed it, but there were some fragmented and repeated thoughts... with a little "touch up" I think would be absolutely wonderful. Blessings, Amy
There are many lovely things about this poem. I especially liked "Fear not dry flower for God holds you near."

I don't understand the phrase "For the flower in the dry land will bloom until it no longer relies upon our Lord..."

From a reader's point of view, I wonder if the very short lines of only 3-5 words might be combined to longer lines; this is tiring on the eyes. If you choose to do this, perhaps you'll also add some punctuation.

The extended metaphor is every effective, and I think this poem has great potential.
A great work. It was compelling and flowed well with rhythm. Hard to achieve in so long a work. I liked it very much.
There are lovely observations and expressions but I agree the 3/5 word lines make this hard going in places. Great potential in this though. God bless.
And hold the nourishment
Of God's word
Within your wilting leaves

Would the leaves be wilting if they were being noursihed by God?

I like poems like that, but it was very long!