The Official Writing Challenge
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01/22/11
I worked for 20 years in a ministry and saw God restore lives and broken homes numerous times. A very touching story!
01/22/11
This moved me to tears and that doesn't happen very often. I'm so glad it has a happy ending, although, I know much work is ahead for the couple. Nice writing!
01/23/11
great title and a great story :-)
01/23/11
I thought your story flowed well & you had many nice descriptions. I didn't really see a connection between your opening lines & the drama that followed--assuming it wasn't the "booger" foreshadowing the "snot." :) The ending was happy, but it didn't really seem to receive the attention you gave to the marital strife & therefore struck me as sudden. You have a nice conversational voice that is easy to follow.
I really enjoyed this story. You made Jordan and his mother so real I could feel their pain. I must admit the ending seemed a bit forced. If Millie hasn't repented or found God it could be the worse thing for the family. You give an important message of forgiveness and repenting.
Moving and well written.
I felt for your mc and his family. Your wrote with deep emotion and I loved the way it played out.