The Official Writing Challenge
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01/22/11
I worked for 20 years in a ministry and saw God restore lives and broken homes numerous times. A very touching story!
01/22/11
This moved me to tears and that doesn't happen very often. I'm so glad it has a happy ending, although, I know much work is ahead for the couple. Nice writing!
01/23/11
great title and a great story :-)
01/23/11
I thought your story flowed well & you had many nice descriptions. I didn't really see a connection between your opening lines & the drama that followed--assuming it wasn't the "booger" foreshadowing the "snot." :) The ending was happy, but it didn't really seem to receive the attention you gave to the marital strife & therefore struck me as sudden. You have a nice conversational voice that is easy to follow.
01/23/11
I really enjoyed this story. You made Jordan and his mother so real I could feel their pain. I must admit the ending seemed a bit forced. If Millie hasn't repented or found God it could be the worse thing for the family. You give an important message of forgiveness and repenting.
01/24/11
Moving and well written.
I felt for your mc and his family. Your wrote with deep emotion and I loved the way it played out.