The Official Writing Challenge
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12/23/10
So true. "A little child shall lead..." Sadly, they also follow. Great reminder that we're being watched - and duplicated.
12/23/10
We need to be constantly aware of how our actions and speech affect others - especially little children who imitate us. Good message. God bless you with a Merry Christmas!
No truer words have ever been spoken. How we act, talk and teach through our actions is how the world perceives us. Are we sending a Godly message? A child practices what he is taught. Thank you for a vey true to life story.
12/25/10
A great lesson here and one we all to keep in mind. Watch your spacing between paragraphs. Adding a space makes the article easier to read. Thanks and Merry Christmas.
12/27/10
through the eyes of babes indeed. a clever story and well told. now you need to look at the boring things like layout and paragraph spacing to give a little shine to your work. check out a few of the other stories where there is speech and you will soon get the hang of that. well done for using this idea and slant on the theme
12/29/10
Hmm...makes you think, doesn't it? You have a nice message here. Try using more white space between paragraphs and commas within your sentences - this will make your writing even more enjoyable to the reader.

Keep it up!
You have a nice sense of humor and delivered a great message.

You've got a great start on writing short stories. In the forums there is a great thread called Jan's Writing Basics levels It's really helpful for all levels of writers.

Keep on writing.