The Official Writing Challenge
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What a lovely story. I enjoyed this immensely. Good job. The descriptions were superb. Keep writing.
God does work on mysterious ways and you showed it in this charming story. You do a great job describing the scenery and setting. I found myself wishing to know more about the characters too. If you take those great descriptions and use them for the characters as well you'll have an outstanding storytelling ability. Keep up the great work.
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good descriptions and an interesting story. I think you might have got a bit muddled up with the tenses in the paragraph when they first encountered the house as you shifted from pest tense to present but the content was great and truely atmospheric in fact at one point i almost thought it was going to turn into a ghost story :-)