The Official Writing Challenge
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12/02/10
Wow! Such strong words. The repeated "again" was very powerful. Well done!
12/03/10
What a powerful reminder about how sin causes all kinds of problems and yes it is a vicious cycle. The body language spoke volumes. Thank you.
12/03/10
An excellent take on the topic. Strikingly interesting!
12/03/10
vicious cycle certainly and so well written ....
12/03/10
Very effective. I also like the repetition of "again." Good job.
12/04/10
Powerful imagery.
But I wonder if the scripture is used to "blame" the victim for not doing "good". I think that the perpetrator is the one the verse should be aimed at.
I like the repetition.
12/04/10
A sad story portrayed very well in verse.
12/04/10
Excellent piece. You write very well. I loved the way you portray a nasty real life issue that many have to deal with in a non-confrontational non-judgmental way. Personally speaking, I don't believe God wants any of his precious daughters stuck in this sort of cycle of abuse no matter what some Christians claim the scriptures say.
12/05/10
An out of the usual approach to poem writing! I particularly like the part "Between love and hate Lord, break the chain. Please help us remember the again and again."
12/05/10
This just broke my heart to know that so many people live in this cycle. Your poem is so touching. The bottom part feels like a cry for help. I hope everyone who reads this gets the courage to ask someone for the help they need. Beautiful job.
12/06/10
This is perhaps my favorite entry so far this week. Excellent use of repetition to get your point across. Definitely caught my attention.
12/09/10
Congratulations for placing first in your level. I look forward to seeing you in level 3!
12/10/10
congratulations a well deserved win :-)
12/11/10
Congratulations, Cheryl. Your poem was powerful and very well written. A very deserving first place!