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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Body Language (11/25/10)

TITLE: Vicious Cycle
By Cheryl Harrison
12/02/10


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Furrowed brow
Hateful words
Spittle on Chin
Lashing out
He is angry ... again.

Just Keep busy
Avoid fear
Lump in throat
Losing hope
She enables ... again.

Shoulders slumped
Soft words spoken
Apologies given
Ashamed, accepts blame
He is sorry ... again.

Afraid to believe
His charade
Reluctant surrender
Cries out in prayer
She walks on eggshells ... again.

Seems calm
Quietly waits
Apology accepted
Promises to change
But, temptation comes ... again.

Suspicion begins
She watches and listens
On guard
Her protective wall maintained
The cycle begins ... again.

Head hung low
Frowns and pouts
His obsession
Seems there's no way out
He gives in ... again.

Weary and Worried
Tear soaked pillow
She feels betrayed
There's no end
She's captive to his mood ... again.

Furrowed brow
Hateful words
Spittle on chin
Lashing out
His is angry ... again

Vicious cycle
Between love and hate
Lord, break the chain
Please help us remember
The again and again.

___________________________

I decide to do good, but I don't really do it; I decide not to do bad, but then I do it anyway. My decisions, such as they are, don't result in actions. Something has gone wrong deep within me and gets the better of me every time. It happens so regularly that it's predictable. The moment I decide to do good, sin is there to trip me up. I truly delight in God's commands, but it's pretty obvious that not all of me joins in that delight. Parts of me covertly rebel, and just when I least expect it, they take charge. I've tried everything and nothing helps. I'm at the end of my rope. Is there no one who can do anything for me? Isn't that the real question? The answer, thank God, is that Jesus Christ can and does. He acted to set things right in this life of contradictions where I want to serve God with all my heart and mind, but am pulled by the influence of sin to do something totally different (Romans 7 - The Message Bible).


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Yvonne Blake 12/02/10
Wow! Such strong words. The repeated "again" was very powerful. Well done!
Mildred Sheldon12/03/10
What a powerful reminder about how sin causes all kinds of problems and yes it is a vicious cycle. The body language spoke volumes. Thank you.
Colin Swann12/03/10
An excellent take on the topic. Strikingly interesting!
diana kay12/03/10
vicious cycle certainly and so well written ....
Allison Egley 12/03/10
Very effective. I also like the repetition of "again." Good job.
Barbara Lynn Culler12/04/10
Powerful imagery.
But I wonder if the scripture is used to "blame" the victim for not doing "good". I think that the perpetrator is the one the verse should be aimed at.
I like the repetition.
Verna Cole Mitchell 12/04/10
A sad story portrayed very well in verse.
Colin Nielsen 12/04/10
Excellent piece. You write very well. I loved the way you portray a nasty real life issue that many have to deal with in a non-confrontational non-judgmental way. Personally speaking, I don't believe God wants any of his precious daughters stuck in this sort of cycle of abuse no matter what some Christians claim the scriptures say.
Edmond Ng 12/05/10
An out of the usual approach to poem writing! I particularly like the part "Between love and hate Lord, break the chain. Please help us remember the again and again."
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/05/10
This just broke my heart to know that so many people live in this cycle. Your poem is so touching. The bottom part feels like a cry for help. I hope everyone who reads this gets the courage to ask someone for the help they need. Beautiful job.
Rachel Phelps12/06/10
This is perhaps my favorite entry so far this week. Excellent use of repetition to get your point across. Definitely caught my attention.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/09/10
Congratulations for placing first in your level. I look forward to seeing you in level 3!
diana kay12/10/10
congratulations a well deserved win :-)
Nancy Sullivan 12/11/10
Congratulations, Cheryl. Your poem was powerful and very well written. A very deserving first place!