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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Body Language (11/25/10)

TITLE: Grandma McKay
By Jill Fisher
12/01/10


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I see her swaying
On those orthotic shoes,
Leaning on the counter and watching,
Expectantly,
For her family to come and eat.

The joy in her countenance
Is bright and pure,
Like her snowy hair.
I find myself wishing, again,
To be as she is.

When she hears the door open, she holds out her hands.
The smile transforms
Her face into a map of lines—
A happy place,
Like the flowers on her Hawaiian shirt.

With hands outstretched,
She leans into the love.
Like a billowing sheet on wash day
Snapping out to touch the sky--
Blown by a warm wind.

She struggles to rob
The last shadows before blindness,
The features of my face.
Getting this right
Is important to her.

I am important to her.
I can feel it in the cool touch
Of papery-thin skin,
And I know without her saying a single thing.
I am her sky.


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Yvonne Blake 12/02/10
Ahhhh...how sweet!
I'm not a big fan of free verse, but you put in a lot of imagery. I especially liked this stanza:
" With hands outstretched,
She leans into the love.
Like a billowing sheet on wash day
Snapping out to touch the sky--
Blown by a warm wind."
Well done!

Nancy Sullivan 12/02/10
What a sweet and lovely tribute to your grandmother.
Great job.
Mildred Sheldon12/03/10
This is a beautiful poem. The body language told the whole story and Grandma McKay filled me with joy. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful poem
diana kay12/03/10
what a great word picture..... I love it
Cheryl Harrison 12/05/10
I loved the last verse.
Nancy Bucca12/07/10
This is one of the most interesting descriptions of body language I've read yet.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 12/09/10
What a beautiful poem. Congratulations on your second place win!
Cheryl Harrison 12/09/10
Congrats on your 2nd place ribbon!
Nancy Sullivan 12/11/10
Congratulations on your second place this week.