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12/02/10
Great story!
Yes, the verbal language barrier necessitates body language. I love how the touch of her hand was comforting. I could see the refusal to take the oranges.
Well done!
12/02/10
Your atmospheric descriptions are excellent. I had a bit of trouble connecting to the story - use some of the extra words to create more dimension for your characters. Good use of the topic.
12/02/10
You painted a strong picture with your characters and their determined communication. I enjoyed the story very much.
I enjoyed this very much. I can relate to your MC. Body language speaks volumes if you just observe. Thank you for a touching story and very well written.
12/03/10
a great piece. very well written and original. People can relate to that "being lost and not knowing the language" situation but your descriptions of China are truly unique
Congrats on your Highly Commended!