The Official Writing Challenge
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12/02/10
This is a great story for this topic! I suggest that you show the exact hand gestures and facial expressions of Zacharias to make it more realistic.
Keep writing.
12/02/10
Excellent idea for this topic. I agree with Yvonne - make it more personal, show us some exact moments so we don't feel like we're just reading the Bible story. Good creativity.
The title was perfect for the story that followed. That is one of my favorite Bible stories. Thank you and God bless.
12/07/10
I like your unique take on this topic. The idea of an angel's soft voice causing Zacharias to doubt is something I'd never thought of before. I do agree that more descriptions of bodily gestures would strengthen the piece.
12/07/10
I like your take on the topic. I'm sure there was plenty of body language when Zacharais realized he was dumb.
You did a great job retelling the Bible story and weaving the topic into it. Great job keep writing I really enjoy your work!