The Official Writing Challenge
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12/02/10
Good message!
Your rhythm is a bit rough, but I like the strength of the repeated phrases.
Keep writing!
12/02/10
I enjoyed your poem and its message. In stanza seven, it looks like "Deed IS what you need." (I always see these little things at the moment I hit the submit button.) Great job.
I enjoyed this immensely. Stanza a little rough but the message came through loud and clear. Good job and keep writing. God bless.
People donít listen,
Especially to us talk.
People sooner watch,
The way Christians walk.


I enjoyed your poem. Great message. Blessings!

12/07/10
This poem carries a fantastic message: Sow the seed, watch the deed. A few more details in regard to body language would have been nice - a hand here, a foot there, although that's not necessary for getting the point across.
Beautiful poem and congratulations for your third place ribbon!
Congrats on your 3rd place ribbon!
12/11/10
Just adding my congratulations. Your poetry flows beautifully with its message.