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12/02/10
Yes, the secret of a good marriage...understanding each other.
You've got some body language in here, but you could put in even more. "Countentance has fallen" is telling, not showing. (shoulders drooping, head down, blank gaze, etc.)
Keep it up, you're getting it!
12/02/10
Every husband needs a confidant like this one ;)
Great story.
Very touching story. Sometimes all it takes is a kind word and understanding. Very well written. Thank you.
12/03/10
great well crafted piece. I particularly like the dialogue as it is not always easy to keep that flowing and you certainly seem to have got this sorted.
Sweet story. Kind of reminded me of the old show "Home Improvement" and talks in the back yard with Mr. Wilson. Good job!
12/07/10
This is good marital advice all around. It should go into a book. I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.
This is great advice. In a marriage it is so important for both members to listen and figure out what the other needs. In my marriage when I'm sick or sad I need someone to hold me and listen. But my husband can be going through the same thing and he needs a quick reassurance from me that I'm here and then he needs time to himself. It took me a long time to realize what I need isn't what he needs. Your article gives great advice on this matter.