The Official Writing Challenge
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Cute, Cute story. The end of the story explained Harvey's quandry.
11/06/10
This was a very cute story. Gray job with believable dialogue.
This was hysterical. I enjoyed this little argument about to talk or not. The ending was precious. Nice job!
This is cute. I loved the little quips: steaming more than the veggies and before we divide the silver. But I do have one questions... did she get a ticket? :o)
11/09/10
Itching ears always need a tickle. Your story points out the unexpected boomerang effect of gossip. Just a few rough spots with the dialogue,but the message is clearly articulated.
Wonderfully written. Thanks for this entry.
11/09/10
The relationship between these two is very fun to read!

Pieces that are nearly all-dialogue sometimes bog down a little; aim for a more even ratio of conversation to action/description to help the readers to visualize what's happening.

This was a delightful read.
11/10/10
Sounds like the tug-o-war that happens sometimes in marriage. You got those voices very accurate. Well done on such a fun piece.
11/10/10
Didn't see the ending coming...it sure came back to her, though. Very entertaining, love the humor.
A very nice, lively story and I really enjoyed the easy banter between husband and wife.
11/11/10
I enjoyed the lively 'conversation'. Sounds like one that could have happened at my house. The twist was an added treat. Congratulations on you HC.
Congratulations on your HC!
Highly Commended indeed. Great job, Brenda. Congrats.