The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a sweet story. It reminded me of my mom who refinished antiques and often groaned when she saw layers of paint. When she stripped it down and saw the beauty of the wood I understood her groans. But you made some great points.
09/14/10
A sweet mom here, and a big-hearted daughter. I felt the warmth and love in the room. The point wasn't hammered into the ground, just nicely laid out in a lovely story. Good job!
09/15/10
This was nice! As an antique lover I could understand the daughter's initial dismay at her mother's desire to paint the furniture. But what a generous, loving heart she showed herself to have!

You had a nice, strong, opening sentence - always good for "hooking" the reader.

Consider including more "white space" between thoughts. It makes the piece more visually appealing and easier to read.

Great job!