The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this very much. I loved how the child analized each situation and the end of the story was perfect. The slang word for mother I believe is mama. Thank you and God bless you.
09/09/10
This story captivated my attention, which doesn't happen too often. Well done!
I fell in love with the MC in the first paragraph you did a great job with this one. It's definitely one of my favorites. Keep writing!!
09/15/10
I love the story and could not wait for the ending. Good job.
09/15/10
This was really good! I loved the "country" sound you gave to the main character and how the ending paragraph summed up everybody's individual situations. Told from the viewpoint of a child, it was just precious!

Excellent!