The Official Writing Challenge
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All I can say is thank you for such a tender story. This touched my heart and brought tears to my eyes. You were right on target with this story. Thank you for sharing and God bless.
08/26/10
Awesome story. Very well-written. You built the suspense and I wanted to know how it turned out. Great writing!
08/27/10
This was a very interesting (though probably a bit too long) story. I loved the analogy 'limp as the spaghetti noodles'. Thanks for a good story.
This was done superbly. I knew as soon as the headache was described that she had pre-eclampsia (I used to work in OB) I was worried that the husband wouldn't figure it out in time. You did a great job of playing with just the right amount of suspense and conflict.
08/30/10
This is a marvelous suspense story. You really had me wondering what was wrong with the woman. I was holding my breath wondering how it would all turn out.
09/02/10
Fern, i really liked your story, it held me on the edge of my seat. I ran through each sentence to the very end to see what the conclusion would be. It was good story telling, that can move a heart.