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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Breathe (08/19/10)

TITLE: See You Breathe ( For Ian J.)
By wendell brown
08/22/10


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There was a time not long ago
When each day you filled me with a glow,
That found the smile that all did see
That you brought to me for others to know

And every time that I did arrive
As I spoke to the nurses you cried,
Because you heard my voice’s sound
And you knew that I was around

Then I would come and lift you into my hands
And you would smile that special way you do,
And with a twinkle in your eyes I really knew
My life’s joy was only you

And the time that we spent together
Seemed so everlasting in every way,
And I cherish all the sweet memories
when on my chest you would always lay

I remember well the day you were born
620 grams and yet so very full,
And all I saw was the need in your eyes
For me to always be with you

You taught me each day to sharethe pains
Of other parents in neonatal care,
And you inspired me to find the words to speak
Of the God above who is always near

For before you were born I was a man of few words
Yet after you came I would always speak
To anyone who would enter into my world
And in their heart God’s word I would daily leave

I remember when you finally came home
Oh it was a very blessed day
For I actually had the joy of my life
Inside my home with me to stay

But after one month my child you did catch a cold
And in the hospital you would have another stay,
I remember the last time I saw your smile
And the way it lifted me so much that last day

I went home thinking that you were fine
And that I would see you again at first light
But then I received a telephone call
Making mother’s day the darkest day in my life


They said that you were playing In your swing
Which was your most favorite thing to do each day
And in a second you did fall asleep
As your breath was taken away

And my heart was so very heavy
And my spirit brought down so low
For I realized I would never see again
Your joyful smile with that special glow

And I knew if I prayed to the Lord above
He would bring the breath back into your chest
But His spirit moved my heart to remember
That those He receives are blessed with His rest

And that one day soon in the near future
When my time does come to leave
I will embrace you in my arms again
And without much pain, I will see you… breathe.


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Joyce Morse08/26/10
Very touching; it made me cry. Good writing is supposed to evoke emotion from the readers so I'd say you did a great job of that.
Mildred Sheldon08/26/10
You wrote an emotional story and it was so tender. You did an excellent job and I thank you for such a tender loving story about breathe.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 08/28/10
This is full of sorrow and pain yet hope is clearly present. You did a beautiful job.
Hanne Moon 08/29/10
Very heart wrenching. I cried as I read it. What a wonderful tribute to your son.