The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice devotional. Your sense of structure is very good.
09/19/05
Your writing is very good, but you need to make a stronger link between the devotional writing and the verses you use. Maybe focus on just one or two verses... And work them into the writing. State clearly the link you want the reader to make. e.g. "As John said, when we see our new heavenly home, we will recognise it as a place God has prepared, just for us."
Otherwise the devotion becomes disjointed.
09/20/05
I liked this. Nicely done.
09/21/05
This is very interesting. Instead of using "be" verbs most of the time, vary your verbs to show the action.
09/27/05
Roxanne, this was a very nice devotional piece, with good comparisons between hotel/motel/home and our eternal home. I was actually surprised how many people came from this particular angle for this topic, but your version was very good. You rated well with the level 2 judges, so be encouraged. With love, Deb (Challenge Coordinator)