The Official Writing Challenge
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08/12/10
Very interesting. You should make a book out of this. I'm captivated by the characters and would love to know more.
08/12/10
I agree, we need to hear more of these two! Blessings, Ruth
08/13/10
This is intense. I like it. The dramatic irony of the child not comprehending the bullet wound is both stark and enjoyable.
Very interesting and a different take on the topic.
08/17/10
Nice sense of dramatic pacing. I was a bit puzzled by Bianca's response to the wound at the end, but Sarah's comment on your piece was helpful. You did switch to past tense at one point in the 1st paragraph, but the piece had a nice overall flow.
08/19/10
I was fascinated by this on various levels. It immediately grabbed my attention because I just recently returned to Canada after 15 years of ministry in Caracas. I could identify with the situation very well.