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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Hotel/Motel (09/12/05)

TITLE: NO ROOM!
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09/13/05


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Joe Baden: But sir, all the other motels are booked, and my wife is pregnant! Her baby is due any time!

Motel Manager: (Exasperation and fatigue in his voice) Since the hurricane, weíve been completely booked solid. I understand your situation. Every day, we turn away dozens of folks just like yourselves, and many times, with even worse circumstances than youĎre facing. Since all the hospitals in your city were destroyed, many hotels have been turned into hospitals.

Joe Baden: They knew for years this could happen, and it seems the politicians, including our city major didnít seem to be interested in upgrading the levees to make our city more safe in the event of a killer hurricane. They were allocated funds for repair of the levees that didnít function properly, but it went to build new casinos and further support the evil in our city.

Motel Manager: (surprised tone) How did you find out the funds were not properly allocated?

Joe Baden: Since the hurricane, all the radio talk shows are talking about it - at least the conservative ones, and some news agencies. Seems that many of our elected officials are just interested in padding their own pockets, or placating the people to secure enough votes to win the next election. Itís corruption and greed that seemed to make this disaster much worse. God will only tolerate so much evil and corruptionÖthen-

Motel Manager: (with indignation) Now wait just a minute, youíre not suggesting that God caused this-

Joe Baden: (a little taken back by the managerís response) No, Iím not saying that God sent the hurricane. If God himself would have destroyed the city, their would be nothing left of it. Whenever God himself judged a city in scripture, the city was completely obliterated, with NO survivors left in the city. Many people survived this hurricane, which tells me one thing, Godís hedge of protection was lifted as a wakeup call to repentance. Common sense tells you, if Godís protective hedge wasnít lifted, then the city wouldnít have been nearly destroyed.

Motel Manager: You sound like one of them fundamentalist preachers who see judgment, and doom and gloom in everything.

Joe Baden: I spent hours every Saturday afternoon down on Bourbon Street in the French Quarter trying to get the people down there to consider their spiritual life. I warned of this. It wasnít popular, because people want to continue waddling in their sin, and donít want to face the fact that there are consequences to their sin. Some got saved, but most turned a deaf ear to the truth of the gospel. I had several people who cursed me and told me to keep my religious intolerance to myself. Iím not saying God sent this, but one thingís for sure, the people from my city need Jesus Christ. Heís their only hope for making it through this.

Motel Manager: Well, you have a right to your opinion, and you make some valid points. Say, I donít have room in the motel, but thereís an old barn out back with plenty of hay to make a palate for you and your wife. Iíll send someone uptown to see if one of the midwifes is available to come and assist your wife should she, you knowÖgive birth.

Joe Baden: Thanks kindly sir. I never dreamed Iíd see this day in America. Godís love is so great if people would just reach out and receive it. Itís a shame that it takes a catastrophe of this magnitude to get people to turn to Him.

(Joeís wife holds her stomach and begins to moan as the contractions begin)

Joe Baden: (with concern) I think the contraction have begun. I know God is going to get us through. Heís never let us down.

Motel Manager: You take her around back to the barn; Iíll send someone to fetch one of the midwifes. Sorry there are no doctors available. By the way, what should I tell them your wifeís name is?

Joe Baden: (begins walking toward the barn with his wife and looks back) Her name is Mary.

Motel Manager: (thinks in his mind) Seems almost biblical. (says out loud) Lord, I know I need to get right with You.

Hosea 8:7 For they have sown the wind, and they shall reap the whirlwind: it hath no stalk: the bud shall yield no meal: if so be it yield, the strangers shall swallow it up.


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Jan Ackerson 09/20/05
If I were Joe's wife, I'd be very angry at him for carrying on this prolonged conversation when I was in deep labor. And somehow the dialog doesn't ring quite true...do people really talk like that? But I'm glad you added the redemption at the end.
Alexandra Wilkin09/22/05
I agree with Jan: there is a very strong sense of you wanting to express/vent some feelings and ideas, but the dialogue needs work. The idea of making the 'no room in the inn theme' relevent to current events is a very strong one, but trying to combine it with a viewpoint on the current event is tricky. Try re-writing the dialogue with Joe's frustrations and fears for his wife more central to what he is trying to say. Very interesting idea though. God bless.
Garnet Miller 09/22/05
'Palate' should be 'pallet'. I like the script. Add some dialogue about the pregnant wife to the conversation.
John Telgren02/16/06
I enjoy reading reflections on stories that we are all familiar with. I did a background study and reflection on the story of the magi in Matthew 2, which led to a sermon. My study turned my view of the magi on its head, and consequently my view on the entire Gospel of Matthew. I will post an article from that sermon on my site with the title, "Kingdom of Fools."